16 Nisan 2014 Çarşamba

Cause and Effect Essay 1 - First Draft

THE EFFECTS OF PARENT,TEACHERS AND FRIENDS ON OUR LIFE
      
      People shape our life and every person has a different role on each other’s life. There are some special people who are parents, teachers and friends in every person’s life. Each of them affects our differently from birth to death.
    
     Parents are the ones who have an effect on our life. Our parents are a big part of our life so, they have a significant role to shape our life. They raise us and take care of us in our homes. We start to walk with the help of them in our early ages and later they teach us how to do things like brushing our teeth, cleaning and being tidy. They teach us how to eat properly.  The first education starts in our homes. We learn what is wrong or what is right from our parents. They also teach us to take responsibility so, they always support us both economically and emotionally when we want to do something. They always encourage us to succeed our works. In addition to these, when we are ill, we can easily heal with the care of them .In brief, they make us to feel good ourselves.
     
     From kindergarden to college, our teachers are the important part of our life. First of all, we learn reading and writing in the primary school thanks to our teachers. Without our parents, they prepare us to our future lives and our careers. They teach us some information that will help us in our future lives. We learn how to thing and how to decide something with critical thinking from teachers.  They lead us how to solve a problem. When we started to school, we had some expectations from the life and teachers help us thinking carefully about what we can do for our future that we dreamed. For these reasons, they are important for us.
  
     Our friends have a different role in our life. Like every person, we have some friends who we need to speak with them when we are in a bad mood. Friendship is important for people because friends affect our live in different ways. Our friends help us to solve the problems we cannot solve alone. Whenever we want, we can ask for their advices about something. For example, they can say their thought whether a dress suit for us or not. Lastly, Friends affect our life a lot by having fun. We can have a good time with our friends. They provide us laughter and they made our life more enjoyable.
     
     To sum up, our parents, teachers and friends affect our life a lot and they have a big role on our life.  From birth to death we spend time with these people. We can ask for advice what we need to do all of them and we need these people in order to  continue our life.

     

1 yorum:

  1. 1) People are shaped our life (tense error)
    2)There (missing verb)some special people who are parents
    3)Each of them affects our(miss pronoun) differently from birth to death.
    4) Parents are the ones who have an effect o( miss pronounciation) our life.
    5)they make us to feel good ourselves.(revise)
    6)We learn how to thing (spelling)
    7) we have some friends who we need to speak with them(delete) when we are in a bad mood.
    8) Friendship is important for people because friends affect our live(sing-plu) in different ways.
    9) They provide us laughter and they made(tense error) our life more enjoyable.
    10)We can ask for advice what we need to do all of them( run on sentence)

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