23 Nisan 2014 Çarşamba

Cause Effect Essay 2 - First Draft

WHY DO PEOPLE DO SPORT?
  
     Why do people do sport? Many people do sport consciously, knowing the reason of it , but  some of people do not do it regularly. This can lead to have difficulty to answer this question. Some of them do it every day, but some of them do once in a blue moon. There are many people who do sports for different aims. People want to be fit and attractive, to have good looking, to have healthy body, to enjoy and to get relaxed, and to get money from their job. So, they do sport to reach their goals.
    
    One reason of people doing sport is to be fit and to have good looking. People do sport because they want to have slim body, they do not want to be overweight. So, overweight people enroll in a sport center so that they can lose weight by doing sport.  Also, they think that others consider them as an ugly person so, they prefer to do sport. Especially women go to sport centers regularly because they want to keep their body slender and maintain it.

     Another reason of people doing sport is to have healthy body. Generally, people’s first aim is to be healthy. This kind of people loves themselves due to the fact that they want to keep their body healthy. For example, we can imagine that there was a machine that has not worked for years. If we try to start it, it will not work anymore. So, people are similar to this machine. If we do not do sports, we may have difficulties to do something like walking and we may have some problems with our body. In addition to this, scientists say that sports balance our blood pressure and circulation. We can easily become tired due to the lack of doing sport. Because of all these reasons, people should do sport to avoid being sick.
   
    The other reason of people doing sport is to enjoy and too get relaxed. Many people do sport or this reasons. They do sport as a hobby and they go to play football or volleyball. Experts say that doing a sport as a hobby can relieve people mentally and it help people being away from the stress. If someone get so distress, it is better to do sports that he likes such as football, tennis, volleyball etc. in his free time. This way, he will get relaxed because doing sport gives him pleasure.
    
    The last reason of people doing sport is that people do sport because it is their job. Professional athletes, football and volleyball players, runners do sport. They compete with others and they get money from it. They both doing sport and getting money. Runners run every day because it is their job. It is also enjoyable for them. Owing to doing sport, they have a healthy body.

    All in all, we can conclude that doing sport is always good for people. Sports are required by people to be fit and to have good looking, to have healthy body, to enjoy and to get relaxed, and lastly to get money from it as a job. All these reasons make doing sport beneficial and useful. I think, all people should interest in a sport since doing sport is necessity of our lives.

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  1. ** to have good looking, to have healthy body (missing an article) paragraph 1
    ** they think that others consider them as an ugly person so, they prefer to do sport. (place of punctuation) paragraph 2

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  2. 1) The other reason of people doing sport is to enjoy and too ( spelling mistake)get relaxed.
    2) Experts say that doing a sport as a hobby can relieve people mentally and it (subjct-verb agreement) help people being away from the stress.
    3) If someone (subject-verb agreeement) get so distress, it is better to do sports that he likes such as football, tennis, volleyball etc. in his free time.

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  3. 1)This kind of people loves themselves (subject-verb agreement)
    2)The other reason of people doing sport is to enjoy and too get relaxed.(I think that 'too' word has a spellng mistake)

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  4. 1) People do sport because they want to have (ARTICLE)slim body.
    2) If we do not do sports, we may have difficulties to( we cannot use "to" after difficulty) do something
    3) Many people do sport or this reasons. (something is wrong in this sentence)

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